Thursday, July 1, 2010

My darling


Well here is my darling for the Share your Darling blogfest. This is a short story I wrote one day when I felt writing. It’s in a sci-fi world, like Star Wars. The two characters, Jade and Karet, are much like Jedi and they just finished their training. They have been friends for a long time but had to be apart for 8 years. They have just recently gotten together again and they now have the courage to tell each other how they feel. This is after the scene where they tell each other that they are in love. ;) ♥ So I hope you enjoy and be sure to see everyone else’s darlings. Thanks for doing this Michelle! (Oh, please ignore my grammar errors for I am sure there are some. Grammar is not my thing)

~~~TGDB
 

We were in the gardens again, it was our favorite place to be. We where sitting on a flat stone by the pool, watching the reflections in the water.
“Tell me what your thinking.” Karet whispered in my ear. I looked away from the water and into his eyes. I slipped my hand into his, twisting our fingers together.
“I was thinking how wonderful it would be if we could sit here together all day. Never having to leave.”
He smiled that dazzling smile that I loved. His fingers rapped more tightly around mine.
“What are you thinking?” I said.
“I was thinking, well, about something.” He paused while his face turned pink.
“What, you are not going to tell me?” I teased. He laughed, a good hearty laugh. Then he grew serious.

“Well, it’s more of a question. One I am afraid to ask.”
I frowned in confusion. What would he want to ask me that would frighten him. Unless….
My heart picked up in pace, my face grew warm. I tried to compose myself, waiting till I was sure of myself to speak.
“Karet, you can ask me anything you want to. You know that.”
“Anything?” he said.
“Of course.” my heart felt a slight squeeze. His eyes grew warm, he grabbed my other hand. A long moment passed as he looked at our hands. It was painful to wait, but I knew I had to let him take his time. This was as hard for him as it was for me. Finally he spoke.

“You know my feeling, the strength of my passion. And I know yours. There is only one thing that would make my life whole.
For you to be mine. Maybe I’m being selfish, but I can not make myself feel any different. You are like air to me, I can not live without you.”
He stood up and got down on one knee if front of me. I tried to consecrate on breathing, I did not want to pass out at the wrong moment.
“Jade, my one and only love. I promise to love and cherish you, to respect you and honor you for my whole life. I will do anything to deserve you. Will you do me the honor of… of taking my had in marriage. Jade Sora, will you marry me?”

I could not breath, my heart seemed to stop dead yet pounded with a speed not possible. My thoughts where a jumbled mess, I could barely think. The only thing I could concentrate on was my answer.
I knew what to say. I did not care what would happen to us, there was only one thing that mattered. When I found my voice I said these words. Words neither of us would ever forget.

“I can not imagine a world where you don’t insist. So yes. It will always be yes.”
Tears filed my eyes, but I did not notice. Karet’s face broke into a smile that threatened to tear his face in half. His eyes light up with that smoldering fire, he practically glowed.
He stood up and then I threw myself into his arms. He held me tight, rapping his strong arms around me.
I hid my face in his neck, crying now. I don’t think he cared if I got him soaked. After a few minuets, I pulled away enough so I could see his face. His eyes where wet with tears to. I could not help but let out a shaky laugh. He laughed with me, a almost musical sound.
“Oh, Karet, how can I express my feelings. How can I tell you the elevation I feel, the overwhelming happiness. It is just to much!” He smiled gently.
“Well. I know how to express mine.” My heart stopped one again.
He unwound his arms and reached up to hold my face in his hands. I could not breath. His face came closer to mine, I could feel his warm breath on my face.

And then his warm, soft lips pressed against mine.
Blood boiled under my skin. My breath came in wild gasps. My fingers knotted in his hair, wilding me to his body. My lips parted as I breathed his heady scent. Then he kissed me back, his unyielding lips moving with mine. His lips where so soft, warm and sweet. It felt like nothing else in the world. And then, all to soon, his lips left mine. We both where gasping for air.
“Wow” was all he could say.
“That’s a understatement” I breathed. My head was spinning. My fingers where still braided in his hair. I could not help but run my fingers thru the golden locks on his head. It was so soft.
He held me closer to him, my body pressing against his.
“I love you, so much.” his voice was a sweet whisper.
“I love you to.” And these words where truer then anything else in the universe.

And then he bent forward to kiss me again.

6 comments:

  1. i always love a good romance scene, esp. first kisses and declarations of love. thanks for participating.

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  2. Good entry for the blogfest. The grammar isn't that bad, with the issue I noticed most was spelling/typing errors. It's more a matter of how the typing went, as my hands make also sometimes type words that are different than what my brain says they should.

    That aside, it's a cute scene, very cute. I like the cuteness of the proposal and how they show their shyness and love for each other. There is a large focus on their breathing though, both the main character up to the proposal and after but also during the kiss. Some variety in that would make it a bit better, but overall I do like the scene.

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  3. I love fan fiction. You did a great job capturing the feel of the moment. Nice post.

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  4. Cute is definitely the right word for this scene. I hear the thunderous heartbeats of dedicated romance readers everywhere :)

    It did make me smile.

    .......dhole

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  5. There are far too few proposals in writing and I loved reading this because it reminds me of when my husband proposed -how magical it was!

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  6. Hi,

    Romantic, and a really cute scene!

    best
    F

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